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Me. I am being thrown to the mirrors. I am--. I gasped. I am being pulled back to reality. I glanced up at Nora Aiwa. Her face turned white with what I saw in my mind. Her eyes are narrowed at me and her jaw was clenched. She let out her breath she was holding. "You don't have to push yourself, Ivy." She whispered from across the room. I tightened my grip on the wooden chair I'm sitting on. I could feel the wood break under my grasp. I inhaled and exhaled and closed my eyes again. Focus, I told myself. I began seeing myself again. So angry. So. Vampire. It's the same visions. Mirrors. Bloody. Another vampire was trying to kill me. Thirsted for me. I focused harder and just like the previous try, I was being pushed out of my own mind. I opened my eyes and saw a piece of wood on my palm. I'm bleeding. Life's great. I threw the chair across the room and Nora jumped at the flying object and caught it before it hit the marble floor. She glided next to me and put her arms around me. Before I knew it, I was sobbing on her slender arms. "I lost it, Nora. I lost my powers." I sobbed. She patted my hair and made soothing sounds. "It's okay. You'll be great without it." She said. I sink on the floor next to her legs and sobbed more. She left me after a while in this big room. This big room, where Ian told me he has a girlfriend. This big room, I attempted to put an end to my life but Nora caught me. Eric knocked and came in. He kicked Ian out of Cult High when he found out that Ian made me upset. He sat next to me and stretch out his long legs. I sniffed and looked at him. He gave me a wry smile and came nearer to me. "What are you thinking about?" He asked. He picked up my bloody palm and healed my wounds. He can heal people. I can see the future. Nora is strong and gets deja vu. "Thanks. Nothing really." I looked at his big blue eyes. They look tired. I touched his golden hair and sighed. He is my brother. I know, but he has to stop worrying about me. "I have to worry about you, Vee. Who is going to? Mom's busy with her work. Dad's busy with our school. And anyway, its like a full time job already." He smiled. Yes, he can read eyes. Its weird, but its true. I got up and hugged him. I look into his eyes again. He sigh. "Okay, let's pack tonight and we'll take the first flight to New York. You tell Dad. I'll tell Mom." He said. "Thanks. Really. You are my hero." I said. He touched my nose and we walked out of that big room.
Okayyy this one is quite the jumble there to sort through. Before I get to the story itself I have to say this one could really benefit from some paragraphing here. Right now this is one big wall of text that's also not being helped very much by some rather quick and sometimes a little confusing transitions in there and its just a bit too much work for the reader to try and figure out whats happening and follow along, so I'd definitely recommend splitting this up a bit more clearly.
On top of that we do find ourselves in a situation where we've got something that is a bit all over the place as far as a story is concerned. There are so many details that seemingly don't fully connect to each other all being tossed together at a rather rapid pace and the end result isn't the prettiest of things to look at here. I think you need to go ahead and take a second look at this one to try and sort out a bit better exactly what it is you want to say and stick with that with a slightly slower pace, especially with the kind of feelings you seem to be attempting to play with here.
So, on the whole, there's certainly a decent bit of potential here, it seems you've got many details planned out and some fairly intriguing characters, it just all needs to be presented a little more clearly so that as a reader you can actually follow the plot of this without a little too much effort.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.