I Died With You; Why Am I Still Alive?

by deleted7
  • June 11, 2011
  • Poetry
  • Lyrical

Removed as I want this account deleted.

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distantdreamer21
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distantdreamer21 wrote a review · Thu Jun 16, 2011 7:47 pm

He opened his bronze urn,
the home in which your soul would remain,
and sucked up the life you had left.

I absolutely adored what you wrote here. I feel like I can actually picture the deceased person's soul being sucked into the bronze urn.

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Chelsea4827
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Chelsea4827 wrote a review · Sat Jun 11, 2011 4:32 pm

I’m really not a big fan of poetry but this I really liked. The last stanza was my favourite.

leaving nought but a cold, dark stone
imprinted with titles, sweet nothings and regrets.

^ I loved that so much.

Well done. Keep writing :)



Everything is a lot of things!
— Hank Green