"Dry Hump"
-SlickJimmy
To say hello was a novel cadence
To embrace hands expectedly tense
-Those feelings became proper.
Topical coffee gave way to our smarts
And steered the course for median hearts
-Those feeling began to prosper.
Each learned the other, no secrets at all
When we held tight, we’d soar and not fall
-Those ideas are quite a foundation.
A comforting hug led a nervous peck,
A bite of the lip led whisper to neck,
-Those ideas are quite a sensation.
Young potential was there to be raided
Raided they were by me unabated.
-Those thoughts were rescinded with caress.
I tried to make right, your offended fragility
By writing some words of profound ability
-But the thoughts are trapped by distress.
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I made some changes to this piece, and declare that is is no longer a poem but an exercise in creative writing. Critique away.