Published July 17, 2009
Temptation drags,
them onto the
limestone rocks.
Catching sandcastles
on the way through,
But it doesn’t care
it neither
feels nor seeks pain,
but it has enemies
like me and you.
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them is the waves!
also i forgot to say that this inspried me too...thank you..its a rather good poem .. to get one thinking on a subject matter of which to write on .. haha well thanks again my friend...
why is temptation draging them ? who are they ? what significance does catching sand castles bring ? why doesn't it care ? why does it have enemies ?
these are all questions that i shouldn't have to ask myself..
the vage-ness can be good.. sometimes.. but here it leaves too much out..
I'll edited this tomorrow when i'm not running around..and do a better job... sorry..