You must not have a heart attack
You are the universe like an atom
which never skips its beats
I don't you to run out of time
You must not hold your breath
The tighter you hold it the more you lose
I don't want you to run out of the breathless air
You for whom nothing was enough
You who didn't know what was lacking
and how to provide it, and to whom
You cannot leave this Earth
before you fill that crack
It was you that was missing
Not the things there weren't
Come back
Who said you can die of a heart attack
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Hi thereee, Darkeyes!
I am Queenie and welcome to yws!
Now, this is a beautiful poem, no wonder it is in the spotlight ! It really deserves it!
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I love this part a lot. The way you talk seems like you never want to lose this wonderful person, whoever this is????
But this is my personal favourite bit...
Tbh, this is an amazing piece of work!
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Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
This is really a beautiful poem. This poem is like a speaker don't want to lose someone and they don't want to lose that person and speaker.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
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Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
I like the title so much and my favorite line is
To me i understand this has like sometimes we keep searching for happiness in other people or maybe in things, when we might actually need to reconnect with ourselves.
Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts
Overall good poem. Keep writing!! Thank you for sharing.