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he was the person that was shooting the arrow. now that i actaully re read what i have written i can go back and add or take out some words.
Okay so if he was attentive why didn't he see this arrow shooting person?
So other than that, I think I saw a few places with a need of commas. I really do like the direction of your story and I think that you should continue.