i miss the way you laughed with me
i miss the way you'd hold me tight like I'd disappear if you didn't
i miss the way you would make jokes but really mean it, really mean you couldn't lose me
and i miss believing that.
now every time i pass you in the hall i drop my eyes, letting them scan the blue and gray floor tiles, my skin prickling at the sound of your voice. too happy to miss me, too.
your smile taunting me, your white teeth against your plump pink lips that i was always too scared to press my own to. your smile is for them now, not me.
i look at you sometimes, in chorus, mouthing the words because my voice is too dry to sing right. i see their head on your shoulder. that used to be me there.
and your words, the ones written on screens or spoken out loud, they glare at me. honest but sharp, forcing my eyes closed so i can't see.
it hurts, my heart being pulled from each and every side until it spills, the love i still feel exposed to your judging eyes.
i'm sorry.
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Oh, my goodness I just felt this poem. Back in 8th grade I had this really close friend who I will call J, and we were really close. He made jokes with me, we did silly things, and that's when he asked if he could be my boyfriend. I was elated of course, since I also wanted to ask him out as well. However, he broke up with me that same week. He said we could remain friends, but he didn't act like he wanted to be friends. He laughed along with his friends when they commented on my unwanted physical features such as my big forehead, and etc. It really pained me that we broke up after we were getting along. So, when I read this poem, I really felt it, especially since this was my first ever relationship.
i miss the way you laughed with me
''i miss the way you'd hold me tight like I'd disappear if you didn't
i miss the way you would make jokes but really mean it, really mean you couldn't lose me
and i miss believing that.''
This is especially my favorite part of the poem.I miss believing someone could care that deeply. That experience was my first relationship, and it taught me that not everyone who smiles with you has the heart to stay. It’s painful to remember, but it also reminds me of how much I’ve grown.
And never feel sorry for the breakup, because you did the best you could to be a good partner, and they're the ones that messed it up. You're the one who deserves a sorry.
This was a very emotional poem and it really really made me sad. Especially since you put the note aswell. I went through a breakup recently too and I've been having trouble getting over it myself, so this truly spoke to me. I can tell the break up likely just happened and a lot of your sadness got trapped into this poem and it feels honest in some ways. The way the end has violence being caused to you from that person feels very real despite the forced things not being done at all and it just may feel like your hearts being pulled around as if it's worth nothing. And, the ending being "i'm sorry" feels like you thought it was your fault. I can tell you it's not your fault. It's going to be ok and it's alright to be sad about this. Them falling out of love with you was never your fault. Love yourself more than they ever loved you. You're beautiful and pretty even if you don't believe you are. Just keep pushing on in this cruel world and confidence is key. Your writing is very great and you're very great. <3 Keep writing and just know that you'll find another person to love. And if you don't? So what! You can find friends to love and love your parents, siblings, and other people who talk to you! And make sure to always treat yourself well. Eat food that doesn't make you feel upset, drink water and other things, take care of yourself, and if you're ever mean to yourself, tell yourself sorry and try to not be mean to it again. <3
thank you so much. I've read this comment more than a couple times, I really appreciate your understanding and validating me. I wish you luck on your own journey too. <3
This is so sad... I wanna hug you rn