Published July 24, 2009
Life & love
Life is for living
Love is for giving
and evil is hidden everywhere
The Heart
I see light,
and i see dark,
that fill the spaces in my heart,
that send away my tears and frets,
and seems to rid my of regrets.
i got bored and wrote these, so they may not be very amazing, but i thought id share it with you anyway
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I really like these. In the second one, replace my with me in the last line, but other than that great work. I'd love to see these extended into longer poems!
I really like these. In the second one, replace my with me in the last line, but other than that great work. I'd love to see these extended into longer poems!
I really like these. In the second one, replace my with me in the last line, but other than that great work. I'd love to see these extended into longer poems, especially the first one. Great writing!
Life And Love
The first two lines are nice, but the third line doesn't seem to fit that well though. I feel like it's just kinda thrown in there, I bet if you just went back and thought it'd be better, but then again, this was just a quick thing, so no real worries.
The Heart
I really don't like these kind of rhyming poems, but I do like this one, it's simple and gets the point across and it sends a nice message.
I would fix the lowercase 'I' in the second line and it'd be a nice little poem thing.
These are nice and okay, but from what I've seen i bet you could improve these.