Published February 14, 2006
Okay this is my first song lyric i have ever posted, and also one of my bands "not that good a" song
Hello there young boy,
I'm afraid its time for you to go.
It's a long walk, I'm sorry,
But it is the end of the show
You spent too long
Inside the world, hoping you'll finally see
you're prophecy
And what you were always meant to be
But it's too late
Your time is over
as you came across
the white cliffs of dover
It's too late to know
as you've seen your show
and your floating ghost
will be Sent through the Overgrowth
Fallen,
Stallen,
Crawlin' on the ground,
Wake up,
Make up,
Take up the life you lost,
and you realise
your foolish ways
as look into show
you just know
you just know
when you saw your own show
As you see your ghost
Fly through the overgrowth
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anyway, thats it. Criticism will be notified and may even be read
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^ correct me if i'm wrong but i have a feeling you meant to put 'your' and not 'you're'. you need to get this right or it'll end up meaning something completely different.
^ ??? hmmm... this is ok but it looks like the rhyming is a bit forced.
^ i would guess this is supposed to be: stallin' (as in stalling without g), never heard of stallen...
^ something about this doesn't make sense.. maybe if you put a 'you' after 'as'...? i'm not sure.
well, you know where to find me if you need help...
~KayJuran~