Heart Failure

Hmm.. ._. I feel you.

This heart and brain thing, that conflict, I've heard a lot about it in my past 16/17 years. But, personally for me, there's no conflict. There's no room for that. You see, to be pretty honest, those two parts aren't different or opposite at all. Instead, your brain controls everything. Your hunger, your anger, your affection almost all of it. So, it's all about the brain. I don't get why heart is blamed for all emotional issues. Brain is the one! Brain should be blamed. Well, just kidding! XD

It's just ups and downs in our life. There'll be good and bad. There'll be friends and foes. That is life, mate. Not saying emotional state is useless. We all tend to be upset. It's like, I said part of life. So, one better not really overthink about this. Just, flow with it, whatever it is. Fix your goal. Stay determined. You'll have the final laugh. That's it.

Now, your article. Some formatting issues I can see, few typos. Just a quick reread could help you fix those! Have a great day!~
Nire.

Welcome to yewis.

You need to work on your grammar and punctuation. The first thing that I noticed, is that you need a space between a period and the beginning of a new sentence. It's a formatting thing, but it does make a big difference in the visual aspect. I used to have this problem all of the time, but then one of my writer friends kept on correcting me, and I finally got into the habit of clicking that extra button and leaving that space there.

Next thing is that the length feels too short. I want you to expound, explain on your ideas and your points. The only way that I can really understand what you're trying to convey is if you put in more details and specific points that you are trying to make.

Also, I shouldn't be telling you this, because kindergarteners are supposed to learn this, but you are always supposed to capitalize the first letter in your sentence, or at least stay consistent with it. I know that a lot of writers have preferences and they don't capitalize things, but you have to remember and try to stay consistent with those types of leanances.

You are too soft,weak and over concerned.

Just because you are Christian,

People often say listen to your heart but i don't want to do that anymore.

Let me hand over those tasks to the brain because you are FIRED!!!

Hey there ceealexx01, lizzy here for a review. I do not usually review stories of this type but here it goes. First off let me welcome you to YWS. I feel it is best to welcome new members.

-Let's get started on my review. Spelling and grammar do not rank number one on my list but they are still very important to me. In the first line you used a semi-colon, where I believe a comma belongs. You are addressing the heart, writing to it in a letter. Dear heart can not stand as a sentence by itself. In the second line, a space is needed in between the comma after soft and between weak. I would also recommend placing a comma after weak but either way is correct. There are a couple of places where spaces are needed in lines 2 and 3. In line 4, I understand the emphasis of the punctuation marks but I think this part needs revised. I would just recommend proofreading better next time. When I see little mistakes like this I like to recommend using microsoft word or google drive for the spell and grammar check.

-You indented the first paragraph but did not do so on the second or third paragraph. Please fix this. The content of your story is good the format might turn people away because it is not easy to read with the mistakes.

-Your story is good overall. Once again welcome to YWS and have a nice day.
-lizzybookclubqueen1