Zombie Love
You are my love. You don’t even care that I’m rotting or that I smell of death. You and I are the perfect couple. You pleasure me more than you will ever know. You are the perfect shape to my eyes, with all the right curves. I get on your nerves sometimes, but you forget it quickly and it’s like those nerves just disappear. You make me feel so full of everything I could ever want. We hold each other together and give each other a purpose, even though we are both in pieces. I chase after you and it doesn’t even bother you. I can stare at you for hours and it doesn’t creep you out. I want nothing more than you inside me. You satisfy my every need when you’re inside me. I don’t know how you feel inside me, but I don’t think you really care. I wish nothing more than for you to be mine always, but sadly, nothing lasts forever. I am just a zombie… And you… well you’re just a brain… and I… I love you.
(A/N: Thanks for reading. This was a silly, cute, romantic, twist of a story I came up with.)
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When I read the beginning I thought of the new movie Warm bodies, then
I got to the end and laughed.
VERY CLEVER! Short, quick, witty, I loved it! Funnily, that wasn't what I expected, I was expecting something like a zombie loving a girl and it being unrequited etc. etc. cliche. cliche.
Anyway, seeing as though this isn't what I was expecting, I loved it! Absolutely perfect! It seemed to be a bit.. confusing in the middle, but that was probably me. The only issue was with the two lines, "I want nothing more than you inside me. You satisfy my every need when you're inside me." It seemed to me that this didn't flow as well as possible? Maybe add a comma or semi-colon?
That's all though! Apart from that, I LOVED IT!
braaaiiinnnss.....braaiiinsss....
I'm sorry, but based on your title I was expecting something a little different than what it actually turned out to be. Having said that, in my opinion, since I was expecting something that it didn't turn out to be, you are genius. It is truly a twist of a story. It is completely a fresh take on zombies in general and what is expected of their nature. I really like it. It's smart, inventive, and just chill. Nice.