Published June 9, 2005
The sun comes out
The darkness fades
For I have been covered with shades
The darkness nears
Bringing all the fears
Blinding veiws from your tears.
Sun shineing shineing bright
But I still can not take flight
Because of all the fright
But I can not fight
the fear.
The darkness of the night surrounds
The ghosts start to give their frowns
Now intwined and bound
To the fears all around
But glimmering light now just found
starting to surround.
Sun shineing shineing bright
But I still can not take flight
Because of all the fright
But I can not fight
the fear.
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Well that is the weirdest post I have ever read!
Seriously join the site or stop coming here... I'm going to contact Nate about this...
Done, Liz. But no one click on the links, no matter what.
-Mesh
Shure Liz make a tune.
You spelled shining and I think INTWINED wrong but honestly other than that. I'm pretty sure I see nothing else wrong. Nice line breaks. And It is a song, if you want I can come up with a tune for it
It's a boring hobby only I probably enjoy. Anyway, this was a nice song. Make another one Piano man... 