My skin is stretched so thin
that people look straight through me.
I have not light enough, nor strength enough,
nor fixédness enough to shine;
therefore I must
like a moth outside the window
be forever locked and barred
within the night.
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this was short, sweet and perfect. i loved the ending. i apologize, as i am usually a rather...or sort of...thorough critiquer, but this is so...good.
*nods in understanding*
great, great. ending = wow. keep writing.
This is my first ever critique so please forgive any ignorance or error on my part.
I really enjoyed this poem, it is incredibly descriptive and you captured the meaning beautifully. Good work!
I don't usually critique(sp?) but I liked this. It was nice and short.
My favourite part is:
I have not light enough, nor strength enough,
nor fixédness enough to shine;
therefore I must
like a moth outside the window
be forever locked and barred