Hi there! I wanted to give you a little advice on posting works on YWS much like Pan did below me. I would really recommend trying to review a few people's works here and get enough points to post more chapters of this story!
Past that, I read through the first chapter (as the prologue) so I can give you some feedback on this story, despite me not being a fan of BTS and not really knowing much about them. So, I guess take that with a grain of salt, but I do intend to help you in whichever way I can.
So, since this first portion appears to be held quite a few years in the past of the regular timeline in later chapters, as this appears to be set in the general twenty-first century, I presume? Which, this is one way to start a story, especially since fanfiction stories tend to be something akin to skipping time when one pleases, in getting to the good parts of scenes or characters as it's up to the writer themselves. That's fine, but it's sometimes not everyone's cup of tea.
This does, however, do a good job at establishing how different this world is, as there are apparently vampires or creatures or monsters of some kind, which alright, this is interesting. I do assume though that this is not a detail touched upon for a whole long while in this novel since the first tag here is romantic and not fantasy.
I am always a little sad when the first characters introduced in a story are killed off since I think the first chapter or prologue to stories should be significant, but maybe that holds a stronger message later.
That's all for now, but good luck with future writing!
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