Hi there! I wanted to give you a little advice on posting works on YWS much like Pan did below me. I would really recommend trying to review a few people's works here and get enough points to post more chapters of this story! Past that, I read through the first chapter (as the prologue) so I can give you some feedback on this story, despite me not being a fan of BTS and not really knowing much about them. So, I guess take that with a grain of salt, but I do intend to help you in whichever way I can.So, since this first portion appears to be held quite a few years in the past of the regular timeline in later chapters, as this appears to be set in the general twenty-first century, I presume? Which, this is one way to start a story, especially since fanfiction stories tend to be something akin to skipping time when one pleases, in getting to the good parts of scenes or characters as it's up to the writer themselves. That's fine, but it's sometimes not everyone's cup of tea.This does, however, do a good job at establishing how different this world is, as there are apparently vampires or creatures or monsters of some kind, which alright, this is interesting. I do assume though that this is not a detail touched upon for a whole long while in this novel since the first tag here is romantic and not fantasy. I am always a little sad when the first characters introduced in a story are killed off since I think the first chapter or prologue to stories should be significant, but maybe that holds a stronger message later.That's all for now, but good luck with future writing!
Hi, bodacious_baekon! I thought I'd drop in with a review for you, but first, something to note:It's never really a good idea to post such a huge piece of work on YWS, especially via a link. I suspect this is why the story has gone without reviews for so long, because nobody has the time to read sixteen chapters when they just want to write a quick review. It's also impossible to copy and paste from the text on Wattpad, which means that the reviewer can't quote and draw attention to certain sections without writing them out. Which is pretty time-consuming.I would recommend that you break the story down and post it chapter by chapter. That will make it much more accessible and increase your likelihood of getting feedback. It takes more points to post shorter extracts of work, but that's kind of the point of YWS - in order to post our own work for critique, we need to offer feedback on other people's.With this in mind, I'm only going to review the prologue of your story, just so you do get some feedback. I'm not much of a fanfiction fan and know nothing about BTS, so I'm just going to judge it as a complete outsider.The first thing I've noticed is a minor nitpick. Your punctuation is off in your dialogue, as in here:
"I need to check on Areum." she said
"Who do you think I am?" he asked, his breath sending shivers down her neck. It was deep and sensual
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