Hey, here for a quick review, let's get straight to it shall we?;
First of all, wow, instantly this poem has made a huge impact towards me, mainly because I can relate exactly to the persona within this poem and just....wow...like 10/10 right there amazing job!
"I look better than ever,
and only I know that I'm broken."
I think this part right here really is somewhat relatable to teenagers in today's world. The fact that although you may look fit and strong on the outside doesn't always mean that the person is alright, like you mentioned "...only I know that I'm broken". I think you really touched a lot of audiences hearts there so fantastic job.
Hidden in the depths of me,
an evil has made home.
The outside of me is perfect
but I've never felt so alone.
This part here to me was an excellent way to bring this poem to an end, it drove out the main point of this poem and it for sure definitely relates to many people out there, especially me. Its depressing to see that so many people with such great potential wants to (16+ ONLY) end their lives when really its just a hidden "evil" inside you (as you mentioned)
Overall I loved this poem, it was pure talent and art, it left my jaw hanging in shock haha. Keep up the fabulous work! Hope to see more great pieces like these!!!
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