We people have a continuous thought that say "what next?". But just stop for a second and think "what have we achieved?". More than twenty years over, but I can't live a life that i want . Society keep on ringing the bell saying "keep running" . I have run so much when I look back I have lost the route back home. Too many things in my mind make me throw everything that i want to be. I have a thought that says even when I am surrounded I feel lonely. God a materialistic person who I kept faith has also drifted away.It is as if our lives have been decided by our creators the day we were born. We are like pre-installed applications for a new phone which can't be uninstalled. When can we live by our rule. It is as if we have to face reality by wearing different mask. Day's will be our enemy. We will slowly torturing our self to be someone that the society wants us to be. Even in the darkest day will there be light? The Angels have lost their wings to fly free. Is there a way to break free? when will there be light?
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Hello there new member! Hope you're having a great time here! On this crazy review day, I have a review for you.
Articles are my favourites. It's always the same great pleasure I get when I read them. It never gets old! Needless to say, I had that same pleasant feeling while I was reading your one. You've got a very serious topic here and a bitter truth at the same time.
That's how you've started. It's a good start in my opinion. And, with a question too what we generally don't ask ourselves often. I don't remember if I've ever asked that to myself. We're always in a hurry to go to the next level, as if we're in a game. We aren't interested much in scoring the best but are just in a haste to finish the game and then say, "Ah, awesome! What's next?" So, at that point, it's important to wait for a minute and think whether we've done it nicely, properly or whether we could've done better.
Anyway, I do think you should pay attention to your writing format though. Because, no matter how strong your point is, if you don't present them nicely enough, you won't be fully appreciated.
Hope you get what I mean.
Personally I can totally relate to your experiences. Coming from a conservative society, I know how a society can be the killer of your dreams. But, it's fortunate that I've got an awesome family who support me in almost anything I do! They don't create barriers for me. They encourage me to go beyond the beliefs. They encourage me to go help people and try the new and be a good person. Even though I can see a lot racist around me, I've never bothered to feel their way. I don't believe in discrimination. Well, well, too much personal stuff, eh? :3
I felt little sad while I was reading this, because it's the reality of many. But, I do believe, we can live our lives the way we want if only we're courageous enough to go beyond what we've been told. Our families can help us with that. Like, in future, you can help your kids and teach them to respect everyone regardless of their religious beliefs and be extraordinary. We can start that with ourselves!
The answer is: Yes. But, why are you waiting for any light? BE THE LIGHT!
Anyway, hope my review wasn't that bad. x3 I liked your article there but I do recommend you to reread it, there are some silly errors waiting to be fixed.
~Nire! x
Best thing for a writer is criticism.
I found the idea or the topic really good.I feel the same way actually.
You can improve the way you have wrote, make it much more compelling and if you change the language, make it much more effective and grasping and commanding then the article will be on a whole new level.
Best thing for a writer is criticism.
I found the idea or the topic really good.I feel the same way actually.
You can improve the way you have wrote, make it much more compelling and if you change the language, make it much more effective and grasping and commanding then the article will be on a whole new level.
Hello there, Gonna review this for you quick!
Overall, I enjoyed reading this. I felt like I could relate to a lot of what you were saying. I feel like you did a wonderful job portraying how hard it is to fit into a society that has such unrealistic expectations. By far my favorite line was "I have a thought that says even when I am surrounded I feel lonely" because, I have also felt his way before, and I think many people have.
Now, the only thing I would suggest, is editing the grammatical errors (several words need to be capitalized, some commas need added, etc, but I won't go through and pick them out).
Other than the grammatical errors I saw, your short article here, did a wonderful job conveying the main idea. Keep writing, and I'm eager to read more of your work!
Thank you so much!!!!! This by the way is my first article and i will improve thanks.