Hello there,
From what I've noticed, this is leaning more towards an essay than poetry. I find little imagery in here.
Moreover, people choose to remove punctuations in their poems for stylistic choices, but punctuations are really vital in poetry. They bolster the message, tone, and emphasis to a certain part. For example, it's confusing when you wrote "plastic everyone." Are you introducing the plastic to everyone? (Plastic, everyone). It was a bit difficult to read and understand your poem because the absence of the punctuation licensed me to glide into your poem without pauses.
Also, the consistency of your pronouns. There were parts where you put u, or ur, but then you'd jump into using you or your. This is important because, sometimes, in poetry, using different spellings can mean that they are different things or people (alter ego, another person, etc.).
Third, did you know that most fabrics today are made of plastic? I researched it. You're actually comparing the same thing. I think you could at least name one pure fabric (with no plastic) such as silk or wool .
That's all I can say for now. Overall, you have a wonderful message. It's very relatable especially since I'm still in high school. I've met a lot of plastics who I valued more than my pure fabrics because I wanted to impress them more. As time passes by, I realized that it's futile to affiliate yourselves with people who don't really care for you. Thank you for that and keep on writing!
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