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potato shirt

by apple the writer


Veggie mall for a limited time was selling potato shirts. The mall was filled and all the fries were sad. The pants were too big for them, so they walked out of the mall. Potato got in his potato car and raced over there, but it was crowded. He could not get in, so he made a master plan. He snuck into the place, grabbed the shirt, and ran for his life. He was banned from veggie mall and they took his t-shirt. He was a sad potato, then he became a couch potato. He sat and watched SpongeBob SquarePants. The end.

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Thu Jun 17, 2021 3:16 am
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Hi, apple the writer!
Here's a short review for you today!

Potato got in his potato car and raced over there, but it was crowded.


Aw, don't you hate it when that happens? lol

He could not get in, so he made a master plan.


I kind of wonder what the potatoes master plan was. It's also funny to me imagining a mission impossible style potato sneaking into the mall.

He was banned from veggie mall and they took his t-shirt.


Oh no! Not his t-shirt!

He was a sad potato, then he became a couch potato.


I thought this ending was pretty clever given that the character is in fact a potato. The poor potato just wanted a t-shirt!

Anyways, this was a very humorous read. Keep on writing!




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momonster says...



THIS IS AMAZING




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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm Harry...welcome to YWS :D....well this was a pretty funny little story and I thought...well I'm gonna leave a little review here..xD...well let's get to it I suppose.

First Impression: Well, right off the bat I just love how there aren't any humans in this, and its all about food items...well...this does remind me that I need to go have breakfast soon...xD...but besides that...it makes this pretty funny to try and imagine not to mention that ending really works out perfectly when the main characters is a potato. Well, lemme take a look at the story itself down below.

Anyway let's get right to it,

Veggie mall for a limited time was selling potato shirts. The mall was filled and all the fries were sad. The pants were too big for them, so they walked out of the mall. Potato got in his potato car and raced over there, but it was crowded. He could not get in, so he made a master plan. He snuck into the place, grabbed the shirt, and ran for his life. He was banned from veggie mall and they took his t-shirt. He was a sad potato, then he became a couch potato. He sat and watched SpongeBob SquarePants. The end.


Now here...the funny part of things involving potato there from like the third ish line onwards works quite well, it flows pretty well...I mean you generally don't have to worry about flow too much when stories are this short but...that line with the fries and the one after that kind of break the flow here, I feel like if you removed those two lines this would be even better cause you then just have the setup to the potato shirt and the whole segment with potato....while fries are connected to potatoes here I feel like they sort of break the flow of the main story there...soo...I'd recommend cutting those two lines out. Besides that, honestly nothing else to say on this one. Its short, its hilarious, it does its job and does it very well.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall....I got nothing to say...yeah pretty much I mean...all I could say is thank you for the entertaining start to my day. A wonderful thing to run into first thing in the morning. :D Good Luck with your future writing and hope you enjoy your time on YWS.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry




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JohnKlue says...



A charming bit of absurdism.
This story simply offers and provides an idea that.
All i can say is that you know what you're doing.
I wish you luck and good fortune.





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