(Someone standing at the door)
A: Ohh, look who is here. Come inside, have a seat.
B: What? Did I actually hear that right? Come in! So you will not shut the door in my face today.
A: (smiling) I have avoided you long enough. Now I have no one but you, so I finally decided to sit with you. What would you like, tea or coffee?
B: Really? That feels so touching but sad at the same time. (sobbing)
Tea is fine.(Wiping tears)
A: Really, you are crying over this? It's not that big of a deal.(Pouring tea and handing it to B)
B: (snuffling) For you, it isn't, but for me, it means a lot to finally get seen by you. I mean, what else would you expect from me? I am literally your emotions.
A: (handing tissue to B) You are right. I guess I was a bit harsh with you. I am sorry for pushing you away like that.
B: (blows nose) I understand. I can be embarrassing sometimes. That is why you keep avoiding me. But what changed today?
A: I don't know. Hey, do you know I learned about a cool word, ledsome? It means the feeling of being alone in a crowd.
B: How scary and sad it would be to feel this word. Don't you agree?
A: …… How was the tea?
B: I prefer it a bit sweeter but it is nice. It feels warm, like a hug.
A: Glad you liked it.
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Hello!! Am moon
Mainly welcome to yws its your first work here and i love this so much. Even my eyes get glossy while reading this.
First i like the tea metaphor here. And i like this kind of work to read like script or dialogue storytelling or roleplay format kinda.its so intresting to read instead of those textbook like stories.and something is if you had mention any name instead of A and B it would be better.
Keep writing!! Thank you for sharing.
Hello moon!! Thank you so much for the review, your review matters to me alot, I wanted to show my work to someone to know another person prospective. You are the first person who read it, I am glad you liked it.
Yep i liked it write more like this the roleplay kinda tq for sharing