Published December 5, 2008
If all the world took flight right now
and drifted like a ghost ship into nothingness
I would kind of miss it, I guess.
Although this night keeps stretching
and my days are dumb and reclusive
I do sort of like curling up under a blanket with you
and watching zombie movies on channel 4.
I know it is better for me to never stand still,
to work and sleep and drink and dance,
write poetry, turn my music up, read Sartre,
but all I want to do really is sit on the sofa with you
and watch all nine series of the X-Files. Fall asleep.
Lying in bed until the afternoon,
watching images under my eyelids
this could be a way to live a life.
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The best I have read on this sight so far. Loved it, and related to it. Modern but not in-your-face or poor quality. It's very poignant and touches on existentialism appropriately.
Every line stands alone in brilliance- the tone is mature yet approachable, it feels like I'm listening to a student turned intellectual, wisdom beyond their years. This is the kind of poem I would willingly recite to an audience. Keep it up, I'll be reading more.
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Hi thanks for the reviews =] your responses are brilliant!
Well... I like the idea that it is informal and that you add things in our every day lives. I think it's a great idea.
It is nice. A bit demented that you would even think earth would fly away like a ghost ship.
The 3rd line is actually good. It's as if you're saying that you will miss it, but not that much.
Interesting rhyme patorn. (7-8)
I don't know. The last 3 lines doesn't really do it for me. I think you need to work on that.
All in all, I like it. It is different and I'm not use to it so this is unknown territory for me.