Your thoughts, your ideas, and everything you do;
Your words and your tone explaining how you grew;
Throws me off balance and puts me in trance,
Makes me want to request “can I have this dance”.
You mesmerize me; make me want to fall for that,
Ignoring the fact that in the end, I’ll just fall flat.
For you’ll never fall for me the same way that I,
For you’ll never let me make you feel you can fly.
I’m soaring in the sky by the way you make me feel.
I think it’d be easy for you – my heart to steal.
I wish you’d take the chance I’m giving you here!
There’s not a worry ‘bout it, nothing to fear.
But I know you never will no matter how I try,
I tell myself it’s possible, but that’s just a lie.
I have to be dishonest, to keep me happy now.
I could be the epitome of trust. I’m telling you how.
If you took me in your arms and acknowledged it,
If you told me you feel for me, even though I’m lit,
If you would accept the fact that I should be yours,
Instead of poppin’ a beer and kissin’ me with Coors,
Tellin’ me you want me but you don’t want a “thing”.
You contradict yourself and the words that you sing.
I want to get to know you unlike anyone before.
I want to heal your soul in the places it’s been tore.
My desire is to make you feel better than ever,
To make you feel handsome, funny, and clever.
I’d be more successful than your last relationship,
I’d hold on to you, and I would never lose my grip.
I’d never fail you intentionally, nor do you no wrong.
I wouldn’t let you feel down, or at least not for long.
There’s so much I could do to make you feel alive,
Without the desertion, and back stabs of the knives.
I’d change the way you view relationships so bad,
And make having a girlfriend not feel like the next fad.
You could trust me with everything, I’d never betray.
I’d make it worth it I promise, no matter what you say.
I don’t want to think about my feelings for you,
It brings out jealousy that no doubt I’ll misconstrue.
So I won’t even over examine the words that you speak,
So that I don’t think of myself as an obsessive freak.
I’ll push it behind me and just go with the flow,
Even if the motion isn’t quite how I want it to go.
I’ll keep being there for you whenever you want,
I’ll never be mean, minus a playful tease or taunt.
An’ if you ever decide change your beautiful mind
I’m here for you to recognize and here to be kind.
If what you want is a casual beneficial friendship
I’ll be down, because I like the way you bite my lip.
Tell me what to do to make you happy, I promise to obey,
I want you to do it even though that sounds pretty cliché.
Just remember when you think about who’s unconditional,
I’m standing strong for you even though it’s not official.
I know you don’t want me more than physically,
(An’ I’ll go along with that ‘cause we coalesce deliciously)
But if you ever waver, which I know you won’t,
I’ll be there for you to love, even though you don’t.
Woah, woah, woah! Hold up!
- Aqua!
First let's talk about structure. Non-existent. I can see and obvious rhyme scheme but...it's going all over the place too...
Here, let me fix up your stanzas:
Your thoughts, your ideas, and everything you do;
Your words and your tone explaining how you grew;
Throws me off balance and puts me in trance,
Makes me want to request “can I have this dance”.
You mesmerize me; make me want to fall for that,
Ignoring the fact that in the end, I’ll just fall flat.
For you’ll never fall for me the same way that I,
For you’ll never let me make you feel you can fly
.
I’m soaring in the sky by the way you make me feel.
I think it’d be easy for you – my heart to steal.
I wish you’d take the chance I’m giving you here!
There’s not a worry ‘bout it, nothing to fear.
But I know you never will no matter how I try,
I tell myself it’s possible, but that’s just a lie.
I have to be dishonest, to keep me happy now.
I could be the epitome of trust. I’m telling you how.
If you took me in your arms and acknowledged it,
If you told me you feel for me, even though I’m lit,
If you would accept the fact that I should be yours,
Instead of poppin’ a beer and kissin’ me with Coors,
Tellin’ me you want me but you don’t want a “thing”.
You contradict yourself and the words that you sing.
I want to get to know you unlike anyone before.
I want to heal your soul in the places it’s been tore.
My desire is to make you feel better than ever,
To make you feel handsome, funny, and clever.
I’d be more successful than your last relationship,
I’d hold on to you, and I would never lose my grip.
I’d never fail you intentionally, nor do you no wrong.
I wouldn’t let you feel down, or at least not for long.
There’s so much I could do to make you feel alive,
Without the desertion, and back stabs of the knives.
I’d change the way you view relationships so bad,
And make having a girlfriend not feel like the next fad.
You could trust me with everything, I’d never betray.
I’d make it worth it I promise, no matter what you say.
I don’t want to think about my feelings for you,
It brings out jealousy that no doubt I’ll misconstrue.
So I won’t even over examine the words that you speak,
So that I don’t think of myself as an obsessive freak.
I’ll push it behind me and just go with the flow,
Even if the motion isn’t quite how I want it to go.
I’ll keep being there for you whenever you want,
I’ll never be mean, minus a playful tease or taunt.
An’ if you ever decide change your beautiful mind
I’m here for you to recognize and here to be kind.
If what you want is a casual beneficial friendship
I’ll be down, because I like the way you bite my lip.
Tell me what to do to make you happy, I promise to obey,
I want you to do it even though that sounds pretty cliché.
Just remember when you think about who’s unconditional,
I’m standing strong for you even though it’s not official.
I know you don’t want me more than physically,
(An’ I’ll go along with that ‘cause we coalesce deliciously)
But if you ever waver, which I know you won’t,
I’ll be there for you to love, even though you don’t.
(I'll admit, I did this one a bit over the place too...)
Okay, listening to this, (in my head) it sounded nice. And obvious plea for a BF to like GF more than just physically. I can understand that. This poem/song is really nice and I enjoyed reading it. Other than the structure, which looked unclean, I have no negatives.