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This poem really caught my eye; very emotive and flows better than any of my stuff. I also noticed you are new, so welcome to YWS!
Your creativity and way with words is captivating and intriguing, and all of the rhymes match up pretty well. However, some rhyming couplets have a dodgy beat which ruins the flow a bit. Your half-rhymes seemed improvised; they could have been better or even full rhymes (though I do understand it isn't always easy in poetry to get the perfect words). Aside from that, this was an absolutely marvelous piece of rhythmic poetry. Keep on writing this well!
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