Published September 25, 2005
Running
I'm running from the pain,
The pain that's deep inside.
Sitting in the rain,
Tears running from my eyes.
Your words hurt me more,
Than your burdensome trust.
I needed you for strength,
I needed you so much.
But instead you keep me running,
From the pain you caused that day.
You took my innocence with you,
And left me running away.
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OK, i like the this poem and the idea behind it, but I'm wondering, did you mean to have "pain" and "rain" rhyme in the first stanza? It takes away from the effect, so i reccomend changing one or the other. Otherwise, good work.