hi Amelie,The meaning of the poem is quite deep and it's amazing too, you have executed all the things in a perfect manner . Here i would like to add something which i think can make the poem a beauty. in your beginning it sounds nice while reading as a poem. up to the line 8th " almost the same skin" it's perfect to read and understand. But, after this line it's little difficult to read rest of the part in a poetic format.Here i feel the only absence or the lack of space is making it little different from above. like reading a sentence or paragraph rather than poem. Hence, it is also creating confusion to understand the intent.apart from it all are nice and beautiful. Keep writing good things.
Heya, Amie. Been awhile since I've done a review but i figured that i would take a crack at this one. Anyway, on to the review. When I first read this I was honestly really impressed, you've come a long way whenever it comes to poetic aspects of life, so I'm a bit hard pressed for this review. The first thing I didn't like was shoving the,"You," down the readers throat. The,"You," in this situation was a single line,
You get so used to touching and feeling the earthly things you come in contact with, that you stop feeling them at all
"I thought of how longI've been alive, clothed in my own skin.Almost the same skin in which I came into existence. You get so used to touching and feeling the earthly things you come in contact with, that you stop feeling them at all" Wow. Very thought provoking! I always admire your poetry amelie.
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