Hard love, that is if you have magic ;)

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

Anyway let's get right to it,

Hi my name is summer. I'm now 16 let me tell you a story. A story that is not a love story. At least not yet

I was seven years old playing on the monkey bars my father came over and said "come here". I jumped down to the ground. And me and my father walked down the hallway he opened a locker door and walked inside. It was much bigger than a nomal locker. He sat down. I looked around. Finally he turned on the lights and I jumped by the sight of my uncles and aunts. My aunt cleared her trout. And said "you have magic"

Hey, thought I'd review this. I'm not totally sure where you're going with this, but I'll try to follow along as best I can.

First off, your grammar. you have a couple problems with punctuation and run-on sentences. In the first sentence, for example, you need to put a comma after "Hi," and you should capitalize Summer because names are proper nouns.
"Hi, my name is Summer."
This is pretty easy to correct, it just takes proof-reading and the occasional google-search to double check your grammar.

Second, some more detail would be appreciated. If you could show us a little of Summer's personality, it would help us understand her better. You said she was playing on the monkey bars, which implies that maybe she likes to climb things. More small details like that would really help readers connect to your characters.

Third, the way you tell the story is very factual and impersonal. You could describe how Summer felt when she was informed that she has magic. Was she disbelieving? Confused? Excited? Bringing emotions into the story make it a much more interesting read.

Lastly, I feel the need to comment on the story's length. Not to be rude or mean, but this is about the length I would go for when quickly jotting out an idea. Details and dialogue would really help bulk it up while still keeping us focused on the plot.

I like the concept of the story. I can never resist a magic tale. Keep writing, I'm sure this will develop into something great!

Ah. Not really sure what you're getting at here. I would start with lengthening the story. It's a quick read. Too quick.

Next, Try to add a little structure. There's not really a plotline. Like at all. Just a litttttttle too... y'know... anticlimactic. I wouldn't mind something to follow.

Lastly, your grammar. There are some places where you need a Comma, or a Period, I'll put a star next to where I put one in.

"...monkey bars.* My father came over and said "Come here.*"."

There are more spots where you should get a comma in there, but you get the idea. And, some more flow, too. The sentences sound like syntax. This happened. That happened. Then that happened.

Alright, have a Jolly one.

P.S. I dig the username.

Hey Happy! It's me here for a review. I'm just going to jump right in, and as you know with me I can unintentionally start sounding rude. A metaphor I often use when I'll be writing more "harsh" reviews, is that I'm like that PE teacher that made you do ten more push-ups, because he knew you could, even if you said you couldn't. Anyways, onto my Review!

I'll start with the title. It's a great one, don't get me wrong. It's just a tad long. Some people adore long titles, others don't. Maybe just "Hard Love" or "The Love Of Magic" I dunno. If you like it, then I say keep it. Now, the winky face. It's a cool little addition yes, but it's not "professional" per-say. It's best to keep emojis and text speak out of your writing.

Ok, so I really like the idea of this. It's got a strong plot behind it. The two main things are The Lack Of Detail and The Length. There's some technical issues as well, but those aren't a biggie.

Ok. So the length. This is really currently just a paragraph, to put it bluntly. (Which you know I don't like to do.) You just need to beef it out some, which can easily be done with detail!

Details are your best friend, trust me.
How does Summer feel? You could add her facial expression, or some inner thoughts. It would really help readers to get to know Summer.
What do these people she's with look like? Do they seem calm, or nervous? Adding in these details will help out as well.
What does the room look like? When she was at the playground, was there other kids there? A friend perhaps?
Simple things like these can really help your story out.

Ok, so the technical issues I shall put in a spoiler.

Spoiler

Hi my name is summer. I'm now 16 let me tell you a story. A story that is not a love story. At least not yet

Summer needs to be capitalized, as it is a proper noun, aka name. The second sentence is worded a little awkwardly. Maybe "I'm sixteen years old now. I'd like to tell you a story." And then the winky face that I discussed earlier. Also, for numbers it's best to write them out than write them as the numerals.

I was seven years old playing on the monkey bars my father came over and said "come here".

This is just worded a bit funny, maybe "I was seven years old at the time. I was playing on the monkey bars, as I noticed my father approaching. "Come here" he said, his voice slightly rough."

I jumped down to the ground. And me and my father walked down the hallway he opened a locker door and walked inside

In most cases, "and" is not a good choice for starting a sentence. In some cases it works, and in others it causes and incomplete or confusing sentence. Also, where did this hallway appear from? I don't think she would have monkey bars in a building, so it's a good idea to add a part about them entering the building. Maybe you could try something like this~ "I jumped down to the ground and approached my father. "What is it? Am I in trouble?" I asked quietly.
I received no reply, instead my father just made me walk with him towards our house. (Or school, depending on where this is) He opened a locker door and walked inside with me behind him."

Finally he turned on the lights and I jumped by the sight of my uncles and aunts.

I think instead of "by", "at" may sound better.

My aunt cleared her trout. And said "you have magic"

First, "trout" is a type of fish, haha. I think you meant "throat". Theres also no clarification of which aunt, as you've previously stated there was more than one in this room. Also, another one of those "and"'s. You could combine these two sentences as "My Aunt Linda (or other name) cleared her throat and said "you have magic."