Published March 7, 2011
It's over and I know it is
But it smells just like you--
My old blue sweater.
Yeah I see you over there
staring at the clouds,
Wonder-struck by rain fall.
No sight of the sun.
Lovely Tuesdays swing by.
I simply miss you.
A breeze cannot carry me into your arms.
My knives to the side
& your bombs returned,
I'm ready if you are.
In fields of red roses and anger
Lies an exception.
A white flower--
The only one.
We laugh in cool water
& stroll on sand.
Brasil, ah Brasil...
Heart broken waves mend the banks
On their way to healing.
Let us just make precious moments together.
A new year. A new us.
With American mouths we sing Alejandro
& Dance to Te Amo
In the water with a heat of hearts.
You are a rich sunset.
One I cannot forget.
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it doesn't matter if your comment is short. Thank you for telling me how you liked it and how you felt. I like when writing is able to do that =)
Im inspired by your poem. I just love it..
sorry if the comment's too short.. I ran out of good things to say. other than that, keep up the good work. like the English used to say " It's Brilliant"
merci harshita. <3
wow!!! It was such a deep and nice poem... You've done the description so good that I could imagine myself in that place.. It was really nice and particularly the emotions were deep felt and bold... that's what I loved about you poem..
thanks for the FB. i wrote it on a beautiful day =]
"I simply miss you.
A breeze cannot carry me into your arms.
My knives to the side
& your bombs returned,
I'm ready if you are."
I LOVE that stanza! Like the person above said, you have fantastic imagery and wording. I like how this poem wasn't too short, but didn't carry on for ages either. This was an amazing poem, you did really well, good job
This is beautiful. You are really good at setting the scene and making what you are trying to say very clear to your audience. Great work.