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I am glad to see more and more new members. I hope you find amazing people and friends here, and have fun. We try to help to every single amazing talented person here so I am glad to review a work of yours which I see is one of your first ones in this site. I think this is having the basics on point but the punctuation could make this look even better, don't you think? I will edit this work right away but before that, I want to say that for a first work, you had done it very well with a lot of thoughts put in the work. This really shows the readers that every each of us is changing the way the people around us are making us change but we need to not let them do it. We need to stay ourselves and change if we want to, for ourselves.
Now, to the edit.
When you see and hear people,
and begin to become
another person from their perspective.
You take away
an important look at life.
You take away
individuality and
you become
so much further from knowledge.
You must begin
to understand all angles,
before you do
the unthinkable deed of losing yourself.
in the place
of somebody else.
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