Difficult to work out as it really isn't in any sort of form, and a lot of the writing is weak, such as "they wouldn't listen if your neck was sore" you shouldn't let your rhyme scheme control your work. This poem is ambiguous, however it doesn't seem like this is deliberate, just not great. I would reccomended re-reading this as well as editing, because it doesn't seem like you are clear of the message you are trying to convey.
Points: 490
Reviews: 6
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