Escaping Love PG-13

Unlike most people, I actually prefer free verse, especially when it's on such a complicated topic: love.

I like the introduction. It makes me want to keep reading, to find out why "we were never right". And as I read, you answer those questions. No blanks, no secrets. I love the descriptions you used as well. Thorough, blunt, explicit. It was awesome.

I have to disagree with you, Roon, however. Being in AP English 12, a course on poetry, I have to defend our young poet here. Poems do not have to be grammatically and structurally correct. Sometimes, being incorrect gets the point across more clearly, because it makes you focus on that particular part more than you normally would. And not all poems rhyme. Think about your favorite song; before they put it music, it's a poem, but does it always rhyme? No. Therefore, to not be hypocritical, poems don't have to rhyme either. (A perfect example is a haiku, with rhyme scheme a-b-c.)

Keep up the good work, Adam. I'll be looking for more to critique and explicate!

Hello, Roon here! Another wonderful poem! Nitpicks first though!

She always needed a fight
We were never right
So there I sat in the endless night
Reminesing on my needless plight. <<Reminiscing also, the rhyme is a little forced.

The love was destructive,total, << space between destructive, total
True, obsessive,passionate,blind. << spaces between obsessive, passionate, blind.
Most of all unrequitted. << unrequited
Compatible personalities wern't our speciality << weren’t
We were elemental fire and water
spitting, steaming and sizzling
with the hateful love of our very seperate unity. << separate
Her opinion dominated, mine was of little consequence << latter is unneeded, you already said the same thing in the former.
it brewed an acid in my chest until it had to explode;
We broke.
Was it freedom or a fall from height? << I like this, very poignant.

Even now, we see each other.
we talk, we laugh, we work.
I will never forget, as I have been advised,
the way it felt inside; to be broken then thrown aside.
It makes it hard to sustain anything platonic. << it feels like you just used this for the sake of it.
I try, I try, I try.
But she for some reason, will not meet to look in my eye.
For what reason? I shall not question,
its not worth the beasting, the sqaubble, the fight << beasting isn’t a word, squabble.
when i can just sit here and beleive that it's me who is, completely and utterly << I* and believe, also did you mean to leave the word 'right' off? I think you would do well to put it in.