Hi!
I think everyone who reads this can agree with you; high school is all about putting forth your best face and suppressing what darkness lurks inside of you. My favorite part is about the girl drawing on her pale skin; there's something very emotional there for me.
Overall I think the poem was pretty strong, but I think you need a bit more detail to provide more intense emotional imagery. Make the reader feel like they know each and every one of these kids, and feel what they feel.
I hope you continue to write about the world around you, and expose the true humans behind their "masks"!
-E
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