Haiku (old and new)

The twilight comes now
The sun's bathed in golden drops
Until night takes them


The hiding sunset
The air between day and night
Beyond the oak tree


The night sky runs deep
The purple black enchantment
Beyond; the stars bright


The shadows deep down
The constant change of colors
Oh! Nature of man


The whispering wind
The strong trees are wise and old
A forgotten realm


The eyes of the beast
The fire mingles with fairy light
Engulfing blue depth


The plants grow greener
The rain clouds obscure the sky
A new world is found


A sliver of moon
The turquoise sky is calling
Another blank page


The abyss below
A pool of water reflects;
A sky with no stars


A King on a Throne
The Ants Beneath Him Minute
Power Unrivaled


Hunt the helpless Pray
When cornered by the bars, Rush!
Freedom; I Wonder…?


The chilling night air
The silence before the storm
A dead world renewed


The greens fold crisply
The jovial smile unleashed
Now, what shall I buy?


The calm of the waves
The chirping birds in the shade
Vacation's calling


Under night's cover
They gather in vast numbers
Oh! All of my woes


The abyss draws near
Memories of the living
Now dead, they whisper


Darkness inviting
Consciousness slipping away
Sleep has come, at last


The clattering roof
A sudden light, nature's roar
A much awaited drink


Sitting on high chairs
The struggle for power endless
The legs have decayed


The jaded flames dancing
The night banished, among stars
The sea’s roar, sun’s-rise


Quietly roaring
A wave crushing moons and stars
Pebble thrown, a circle spreads


A broken tree looms
The sky, covered by the dark
A damp summer night

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ab5986
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That was accidental, thank you for pointing it out though.

Hey. Amazing haiku! It was the first I have ever read but I have heard many in the past. You linked them beautifully and the words used were excellent. Great descriptions and good length. I loved the nice, gentle serenity feel it gives off. I do have to make one criticism however:

These are all of my haiku, please comment.

I understand that it is hard to think up of a line with 5 syllables but it is still doable. This ruined the beauty of the poem a bit which put me off.

Other than that, fantastic!

MWAHAHAHA!
-RepublicOfCoter(ROC)

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kingolions
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Hey. I have tried haiku's before, and I think you did infinitely better than me. I found that they flowed well, and I don't know if they were supposed too, by I found that a lot of them seemed to flow on well with each other. I think what you did was really good. Just, if they weren't supposed to go together, the I would think about formatting.



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