Published June 20, 2011
DAY 1: Adventure! Out of the House!
Today,
I jumped off of the shelf where all of my friends were. Mum warned me not to get near a cat cause they rip dolls like me to shreds! Since today is really important, I tied my carrot hair into a high ponytail with a blue ribbon. It looks too cute! I've got to go find Henry, my little brother today. He's in the rose garden!
QUOTE OF THE DAY:
"Running for brother! Thorns don't hurt me! Mum sees no splits! Feel like This!"
Love Love,
Shallot Lalarae!
A/N: I'll do two versions for TTfSD Days. Diary mode, and Story mode. *D* means Diary, and *S* means Story.
See you guys La-ter!
P.S. I won't be doing Storymode for DAY 1.
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This sound like it could be interesting. I really need to read some of the story part to really be able to tell you how interesting it is. As for the first diary part, it seems kinda bland. I think it is great that the character/narrator skims over what happened the previous day, but she need to have more of her own voice prominent in the diary. When I think diary, I expect to see the characters thought and feelings about something, where as this just showed me a little taste of herself. This does have potential if you keep working at it. Good Luck with writing!
Sounds like it could be interesting! Good Luck, and have fun!