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a particle known as oblivion

by Wynorrific


back when

the day was young,
earth's great eggshell would glisten--
the yolk would sing.

beneath it, men in coats sat.
frolicking birds
they were, who hung hands on racks
and eyes on hooks.
they did insist on their ways.

one day
I revealed to them what else
a man could hang,
this time
from the ceiling.

they kept their ways.

my time then came.
I would have stayed
if I could, but
I was not born
to move at all.

the larks laughed at fate. they held
canteens
high to a jocund fire.
burning, burning.
their hearts churning-- destiny.

at 9 pm
I grew attached
to my new aviary.
the embers ever burned now.

the men grew ill,
burnt out by life.

at 10 pm
cracks of light were whispering.
fearful, I fled
and shut my door.

the embers never burned now.

they wanted in
but I wouldn't let them in
from crumbling
night's arms.

"please don't crush them!"
"leave no bodies in the ditch!"
voices
howled above the empty din
yet still
they were only whispering.
I left all for
death to deal with.

at 11
pm, the bird
men were haunted, dreading, searching
for a memoir--
for one minuscule fabric
of existence
that sauntered here,
its coat thick with tar, heavy.
a flammable onyx. an
ignited asbestos cowl
set forcibly ajar. when
they all finally knelt down,
I built thrones from the ashes.

you, prove
that someone was alive once.
the evidence:
meteor scars,
bones solidified in ice.
is that enough?



am I alive?
it is far too late to find
myself.
I am
caught inside this careless Thing
with tangled hair--
headless, shifting here and there--
its follicles protruding
obtrusively--
sick midnight arms,
charred to charcoal,
fogging up the atmosphere.

our lives are now
wasted
there on the streets.

there on the streets
people lurked in their silence.
they wanted in--
caged larks--
but nobody let them in
from thundering
darkness.
people soon asked
about those whose lives were lost.
I and every one replied:
"no, not me, not I, good sir,
I could not. see,
I was busy.
I could not see
them there."

our lives are now
wasted.
dripping canteens
dripping, dripping
lighter fuel that
could've lit up
the whole wide world.
dripping,
we are dripping, fervently.

at 12 am
another bled.

see this madman!
to prove
someone else had fallen dead,
fumbling the deed, he must
have severed his
own head.
fate came.
he saw his soul
disintegrate
from the red hook on the wall.

whose choice is it
to expect death?
not ours, not his
if death does come.
it did.
he wanted in
and nobody let him in.

the bystanders
stood by,
waving, pointing greyish flags
in every known direction.

"are they alive?"
"are they a lie?"
such questions
have no answer.

led by the true
accountability of
delusion, they
reared their heads high
with the "she said"s.
"I think, I thought, I haven't."
"well, I have but won't again."
"I never did
and never will."

that tall
lumbering Thing--
flush its remains down the drain!
the world hasn't pitch
under blindfold
for it has, no longer, songs
nor muse
nor books and scrolls to peruse
and it is terribly sad.
this beast,
this-- this hairy wretched Thing
is evidence.
it is evident that you
heard it
once in a cold fever dream
while running a
fever
of 103
or so it seems.

years, years
beating the corpse
to a grey pulp.
feeding it to their children.
“eat this,” they said
“you can’t stomach the torment.”
festering wounds,
as black as imagined death.

“it’s better now.”

when the door shut overhead,
closed to pitch black,
these tales would lie within them
in their coffin,
overturned and bleeding red.

time passed.
there, many-taled children too
would lie.

people thought burial was death.

at 1 am
cracks of light aren't existing.
instead,
through everyone's sipping of
illusive vitality--
of a not-really-curing
medicine, the
Thing is now “dead”.
I stand at its grave and mourn
the hated life.

dripping, dripping
they are sipping
canteens
while still they bleed.
oft' the beast had been sitting
wrapped 'round their necks.
piercing teeth of smoke-- that hole,
that cavity deftly left--
there the skeleton lingers.
it amuses me alone.
so god,
what am I then
if not a man?

brutality;
it wanes to a blundering
benevolence.

still, they are here, whispering,
"what's next? oh, are
we next? who's next?"

the sky, it is
jet black tonight.
I join the rest.
thick with tar
upon beds of night we lie.
somewhere,
down by
the midnight shore,
we bow our heads.
voids gaze into an abyss.
they see themselves.
I see nothing
at all.

at 2 am
the witching hour
draws nigh.

raven water
rises skyward bearing red.
it swirls, black mist
above our heads.
twice fold, thrice fold,
manifold we
behold
the life which dies!--
but not in entirety,
for this life is yours and mine.

however,
I confess
I did not know
that my death would feel like life.

most souls disintegrate here.


who chose that path?
not I, nor you
so perhaps it is not true.

someone
prove that we are
not dead.
cast us out on fishing lines.
toss our bodies.
mangle and flog what's left.

no evidence. flesh burning,
burning.
the blood is charred to charcoal,
hogging and clogging the air.
grimy, curling
smoky fangs nip at the ash,
the ash--
they crumble on the pyre.

ah, so we have known death for
an instant in our lives, but
now we are dead.
evidence. no
evidence. grey
bodies turned.
corpses here lie,
turning into nothingness.





darkness?





wait, it is night.
I see the tide.
red waves roll in the distance.
lo! I lie to
profess that I do not lie
and hear the sea.
I know its tragic clamor,
its solemn, lonely bellow.
god, where am I?

I fear my life.
I fear that I have survived.


oh god!
I swear,
though I live and they do not,
I am not one of god,
nor God Himself.
what am I then?

born was I not.
go do I, but never move.
no name have I, nor face.
dripping, dripping
not at all. I am a ghost,
or I am nothing at all.

I clasp the line
but reel no sign into sight.
water laps at
the shore
like biting sparks.

"let them all in,"
I--- cursed I!--- plead
of death,
by whose side I ever stand.

to this, only
silence replies.


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Wed Apr 22, 2020 10:37 pm
shayspeare wrote a review...



Hi. I'm Shay, and I loved your poem.

I could say that this might be epic poetry, or at least extended poetry because it's very long. As thegoldenbird wrote, people wouldn't read a poem this long. Usually poems like this are from stories of ancient Greece. Epic poetry.

Because of this, I suggest getting to the point poetically. I don't hate this. But this could be way shorter and still convey the same message.

Have a great day.

I hope this review helped.

- Shay.




Wynorrific says...


My idea was to establish imagery in one way and then subvert it later in the poem, but you're right: I drew it out WAY too long. Initially, I had thought doing so would help set up the creeping realization of the narrator's unreliability. It's more of a narrative told from a unique perspective than anything else. However, when I edit this, I'll look for parts that aren't necessary and cut them out. Thank you for the review. It was doubly effective since your review was concise, hah-- following your own advice.



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Wed Apr 22, 2020 5:58 pm
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Hi Wynorrific!
I just wanted to tell you how well this poem is written. Usually people don't read long poems (although I like to), but it's kind of impossible to stop midway once someone has started reading this. According to me, it is the perfect blend of mystery and dark stuff that keeps the reader going to the next line and the next and the next.
Though this poem is perfect in every aspect of language that I have noticed, I just wanted to tell you to proof-read this once. I think, and tell me if I'm wrong, that you wrote it somewhere as a text file and then uploaded it here. Since it's a long poem, you might not have thought of proof-reading. However, it contains certain mistakes like non-capitalization of the first letter of each stanza or after a period, repetition of a line twice by mistake (in the first stanza itself), writing the title again in the body of the poem etc. These are just tiny errors that mar the beautiful language and put the reader's mind off. They'll be easily noticeable to you, hence I'm not pointing them out individually. Just proof-read this once to make this work perfect.

Once again, this work is great and I like your style of writing. Don't drop your quill. Keep writing!




Wynorrific says...


Yes, I copied it from a text file. Thank you for pointing out those errors. I'm not sure how I missed them, haha. I'm glad you weren't put off by the length of this poem.



Wynorrific says...


Oh, it seems I forgot to mention this: the lack of capitalization was intentional. I consider this a very experimental piece compared to what I normally write (except for the language and imagery), which perhaps wasn't too wise. I didn't realize anyone would think of the lower-case as a mistake. Maybe it's because there were a few other errors? Well, either way, I'll look into that. Thanks again!




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