Published March 15, 2011
No aethistic comments. And yes, I know it doesn't rhyme lol.
The father in our life,
Please be merciful.
I know that I have sinned.
You know it more than I.
Please god,
Show mercy on thy foolish sons.
Show mercy on your beloved ones.
Oh lord, this prayer is not for me,
But for the ones I know;
The ones I don’t.
I know the world has sinned,
Greater than even I.
Please lord, forgive them.
For when they have sinned,
I have sinned.
And for my sins,
I am truly sorry.
Amen.
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I laughed at your warning, because I am infact an athiest. But since when did that matter?
there isnt much wrong with this poem, that I see. It is well planned. You did give a good clear surge of the message. Though, it was hazy at first. But the flow is never broken and the the theme is nice. Congrats! 