A little forced, but definately cute.
I love poems that are formatted and structured to do with the theme - it makes them easier to read I think and it's nice to have read it, then look at the structure and just go.. "OH YEAH!" So good work (y)
Try to capitalise your words - look for typos - proof-read or get someone to read it back to you so you get two opinions at the same time.
Keep writing!
Points: 890
Reviews: 19
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