Published December 18, 2011
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I wanted to wait until I read all the chapters before commenting, and now that I have, bravo. This is a very nice work. You keep the action going. You draw me in and keep me entranced. Now, the only real critique I have is length and it's really just personal taste. Your chapters are too short for me, there just isn't enough for me. One thing you could do is add some more description, I'm not seeing a whole lot othere than very basic 'it's a castle, it's a gun, it's a dude, ect'.
Overall, a very entertaining work and I seriously await what happens next.