Published December 4, 2011
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Okay this is interesting. I'm never usually the first person to review. I liked this chapter and finally I get to understand the connection between Kate and Jeffery. We also get to know what they are meant to be doing : serving the king. I just have one little nitpick:
- Here you spelled aura wrong. It's aurora.I've gotten to know the characters better and now I am interested to know why the city is under attack. Is there a war going on? You've set a bit of background information in, but there is still a lot more to find out.
Full speed towards next chapter!
Deanie x