I really like this poem! Its short, simple and to-the-point but contains some really good symbols and meaning in it. I really like the whole idea that we are immortalized because of un-moving, immobile tombstones/memorials. Also, I like the contrast between marble tombs and marble bones. In a way it almost seems to me like you're relating the marble memorials we put on our dead to the "marble bones" of not only the dead and buried but also the living. This gives it a little bit of an eerie feeling of impending death.
The only thing I question in this poem is the "remains of war" at the end. I get it that apparently these people died in war but to me it seems a little bit sudden to have these dead people who are buried and then in the last line mention that they died in the war. I mean thinking about it now, its perhaps not a bad thing that that is the only reference to the war because, actually, to me, now that I think of it, it is sort of symbolic. Almost like it didn't really matter how they died, the way which they died was an after-thought to the immortality of their bones and memory. To me this is a pretty prominent idea because we always say "we need to remember those who died fighting for our country" or whatever. But really we don't want to remember them as fighting men/women. We want to remember them for who they were, people just like you and I.
Great poem! Keep writing. I know my review was a bit rant-y but that is just how I work. haha
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