Considering that you only wrote this in five minutes, this is very impressive! I certainly could never manage to churn this out under that kind of pressure. The imagery you utilized is excellent, and really evokes the feeling of new birth, of breaking free from the past. As an ex-mormon, I relate to this feeling of leaving something confining behind and seeing the world with fresh eyes. That process was (and is) a lot longer than a simple breaking of an eggshell, though. I like the prison and light words that you use throughout the piece, as well as your descriptions that make me think of vulnerability. When you are making a new beginning for yourself, you often will feel vulnerable and naked as you come to understand yourself and the world around you.
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