Ooh, this is super interesting! I love the idea of a news broadcast as a chapter! I haven't read/listened to it yet, but I'm sure this is really going to work as a summary of recent events, which will be helpful in organizing information and reminding the reader what they've learnt so far. Super unique, I love it!
I was thinking, maybe this would work better as something in between chapters? Or like a little thing at the end of chapter 16? Of course, if you like it as stand-alone chapter, that's perfectly fine too! I just was giving you another suggestion, since it's unlike your other chapters.
President Godfrey Smith of Clarksville, Tennessee has announced his vice-presidential pick way earlier than expected. Alabaman Governor Nolan Peters will be joining him on the ticket in November.
Ooh okay! I hope he's a good choice :O
An avid independent and former Republican, Peters is known to have had trade deals with important people we should care about before Alabama was readmitted to the Union.
Ooh, which important people? I would love to know more about this dude!
Supposedly, William McHale traded ammunition for stew with him-- but that’s just crazy talk, I suppose. Then again, McHale is a bit of a crazy guy, isn’t he?
xD Haha, I love this part. McHale is one of a kind, and his craziness makes him awesome cx okay but that sounds like a pretty good trade, yum
What kinda guy commits to a party but doesn’t join it? What’s up with these post-apocalyptic politicians? Maybe the radiation’s messing with their heads...
I love how Johnson is reporting politics in a lighthearted manner; it makes a heavier subject a lot easier to deal with. I need this news reporter c:
For three long years, we have strived to remain America.
Maybe this is just me, but "we have strived to remain America" sounds a bit strange. Maybe American? In America?
I dunno much about Davis, apart from him winning in Illinois, but his daddy Winthrop was the best governor we’ve ever had. Maybe greatness runs in the family… Just maybe.
Omg this reporter seems like such a casual guy xD I love how his style is consistent; cracking jokes, informal language, etc.
Anyways, whoop-de-do. We all knew this was going to happen. This shouldn’t be some big shocker. This kind of crap happens all the time! Who the heck didn’t expect this?
Yeah, I can just imagine this guy being on the radio. I think it's a nice way to deliver news in a time of unrest and uncertainty. The people probably need a bit of humour in their lives while staying up to dare with current events, and this seems to accomplish that! the first thing it reminded me of was fireside chats, even though this and those chats are totally different haha cx
I really liked the change! I think it added a bit of lightness for the reader as well, not necessarily just your characters. It was interring to learn about something in a different style!
So, uh... My voice is terrible XD
Not at all <3
Points: 29825
Reviews: 465
Donate