Rated 16+ because i not sure you'll get it otherwise. But hey, there are some pretty mature people under 16. Read at your own discretion than. It's not to bad but better to be safe than sorry.
Sugared Venom, my Sweet Temptation
He stands ethereal, my demon, my love.
His fingertips are soft, his embrace inviting.
Translucent eyes bore into mine
For what has he to hide from me?
He’s given me the world and its wonders,
Seducing me from the light…
…pulling me into darkness.
He stands ethereal, my demon, the love of my wayward heart.
He beckons to me, honey dripping from the lips that conceal his forked tongue.
Each of my desires seems laid bare before his eyes
And he holds each for ransom: if I should sell more of my soul
I can have more of the world.
He seduces me from the light.
He drags me into darkness.
He stands ethereal, my demon, my sweet and treacherous temptations
Visions of riches, pleasure and ecstasy he sends to me
Succulent like chocolate, dangerous like sugared venom.
He is a slow-acting poison and I the willing drinker,
Enjoying the thrills as I convulse, wither, and fade.
He seduces me from the light.
He drags me into darkness.
And in tears, in foolishness, like a slave I follow.
But there stands another, His voice a soothing whisper compared to my demon’s sirens.
Opaque eyes with unfathomable depths seek mine.
It is these eyes that open mine.
It is His lips that draw forth the venom from my wounds
He heals my self-soul-mutilations with his breath.
He calls me from the dark,
Carries me into the light.
He stands eternal, my Lord, my Savior
He has never forsaken me when I forgot Him.
Wielding a sword of truth, he slays my sweet and treacherous temptations,
Casting out the demon I once loved.
He gives me a cup of joy and not of poison.
He calls me from the dark,
Carries me into the light.
And I find myself a slave no longer.
I really love this! The emotions are very raw in this poem. It seems like this poem can relate to a variety of people.
This was my favorite part:
Keep up the good work!
Hello, Veritas! Must say I loved this, very powerful emotion in this poem...my only recommend is to shorten the longer lines or split them up so all the lines are at least about the same length. Such long lines suddenly tossed in there makes the poem loses its rhythm. But, all in all, I enjoyed this. Just work on the line length and I believe it'll be even more beautiful~ If you need anything or have questions feel free to PM me!
Aydan Soulkana<3
Fantastic mate, it trapped emtion on every level.
I really enjoyed it and hope to read more of your work soon.
I think the first stanza is particulaly affective at grabbing the reader and pulling them in
Keep writing
Ste