Published February 23, 2011
There I hide
In the shadows of your mind,
In the dungeons of your soul,
In the forests of your heart
I used to be ubiquitous
Little strands of my hair
Lay once on your clothes,
The smell of me
Was once one of yours
You could find me anywhere
Without the need to search
I was imprinted in your life
Tangled in your mind
Everywhere
Everywhere was a piece of me
My toothbrush stood by yours
My hairbrush near the mirror
My clothes now packed away in your past
Used to lay all around your apartment
I didn’t die
I disappeared
I closed my eyes and didn’t exist
I turned away and off went the bliss
When love goes wrong
That is the end
Then two part
Each holding the other’s heart
That’s what occurred
To you and I
A Sigh turned to a Cry
Then sadly a Goodbye
Now we’re each a distant memory
And where is all the evidence of me?
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hey all. thank you so so much. i'm a very busy writer so I have to keep this up-to-date. I'm everywhere, my blogs: www.malawi-throughmybrowneyes.blogspot.com, www.malembo.blogspot.com. you can check my portfolio or just send me a message and I'll give you something to read. thanks for the reviews. If there is revising I will surly do it, glad you liked it.
xxx Upile xxx
Hey! I really liked this! It was amazing
I liked your word choice,
Those were two of my favorite lines! There was a good flow throughout the entire piece and the images it conveys are very strong. Also, this piece seems very full of emotion. I would love to read more of what you write, keep writing!
-Kayde
Hey! Very nice.. N touchy if u know what is exactly the person would be experiencin! It is real wonderful n i think that u should try to elaborate it a little cuz the topic is strong! there is a lot of play u can do with it! So don't just stop with an end.. if you catch this grip at it! You can do much more.. So just keep doin what ur doin!