A group of friends is good and nice,
But what happens when they’re gone?
When good friends become enemies
I wonder what went wrong.
Who said what and when was this
I wish we could go back to times of bliss.
But times change and people too
Time erodes all things old and new
So instead take it as a lesson
Time with friends is a blessing.
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Hello Unfunnyguy1998, Katja here to leave you a review! Please feel free to disregard any and all comments or suggestions I make should you find them to be unhelpful. That being said, onto the review!
Overall Opinion & Interpretation
Your poem seems to express a broken up group of friends, a need to never take friendship for granted, as "times change and people too" and a need to teach other's a lesson from their own experience with this, that friendship is a blessing and not to be taken for granted.
Short and to the point, I really did enjoy your poem. The topic is a sad one, broken friendship can be a devastating thing to go through. It made me wonder why the friends became enemies, though.
Suggestions
I found myself wanting to understand why ? I'm not sure if this poem is personal or inspired, so I'm always careful when suggesting these things... However, the poem struggles to really hit the reader emotionally (in my own opinion of course) as there is not much to base this off of. All that we learn is a group of friends became enemies and the narrator wants to stress that time with friends is a blessing.
I also don't particularly love the adjectives "good and nice" in this opening line. Purely my own opinion, but it draws away from the meaning and tone of the poem as a whole and felt juvenile to me. Technically there isn't anything wrong with the words usage, I just feel they take away from the poem itself. I don't have any suggestions for replacements, though. I simply suggest reading it over again and seeing if you agree or not. Purely a suggestion, not a correction!
Not a suggestion, but I really love these lines. I love that the narrator or writer is using this experience to teach a lesson they feel is important. It is a sad thing to lose friends, but an incredibly mature thing to take a sad experience and use it to help others.
Not knowing the reason makes it hard to judge whether or not I agree with valuing time with friends who became "enemies", but the poem itself as a poem, I enjoyed reading and I like that it has a moral teaching.
Overall, I enjoyed your well-written poem. I look forward to reading more of your work soon! Keep writing,
-Katja
Hello! This poem is simple, yet awesome and provokes an interesting point of view. I really like how short it was, because the meaning just hits you before you can even process what's happening. So, overall, I think this is a great poem and you should definitely write more!
Hai!! I am B, ((Which you already know)), I will try to make this into a review!!
First off, I am going to state the good parts about this poem...
I love your poem, and the way that it is worded.
I have no idea why, but I specifically love this part...
"A group of friends is good and nice,
But what happens when they’re gone?
When good friend become enemies
I wonder what went wrong.
Who said what and when was this
I wish we could go back to times of bliss."
This part is so simple, and honest, it is true, and easy. It is literally how it is.
And secondly, I only see like one problem, and in is only minor...
I would have made this poem a little longer, because it was very short, and I would want there to be more of your amazing poem.
This a great poem.
but overall, I loved this, it was Fantastic!!!
Keep up the great work...
~B