Published April 26, 2013
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Hi there Roxy here!
I like the concept of the poem, it's very relatable!
You will have to capatize all of your sentences, because it just looks a bit messy at the moment!
I have to disagree with jordin
"I'm always stressing so I start drinking
I'm just probably over thinking." These are my favorite two lines! So full of honesty!
If you polish the piece off a bit I think it could be really great!
Keep up the great work!
Hello there here is a me with a review it probably won't be as big as a normal review but my excuse is it is for review day and I am trying to do review for other people so I can't do both at the same time.
sorry but is does not make any sense.Hopes it helped.
OK I think you need to put in the commas at the need of what you say.
And you also have put up a bunch of capitalized letter at the end of you line when you go down a line or maybe I am just looking at it wrong.
One more thing what does this mean
OK overall this was great you rimes were really good and you spelling and grammar and punctuation and such was good too.
Until latter "Good bye and may god be with you."
~JDL~
Hope it helped you out.
Forgive me if I rambled I do that a lot any way if I did sorry you did really good too just in case I did not say it bellow.
Crazy here with first review for the green team~!
Its short and simple, and well written. I can understand what its about, and that is a lot coming from me. This line right here is my favorite-
"You think I'm stupid?
I obviously got hit by cupid"
- Because it is where you get the idea of the poem and feel the irritation or frustration at her situation. Also, right here is the shift-
"You swear your saying the truth,
but how am I going to believe you"
There aren't any mistakes that can see, and keep up the good writing~!