Heya, Tuckster, Casanova here to do a review for you. I hope you're ready, so let's get started.
The familiarity
of all these patterns
brings back memories.
Memories of youth
memories of growth,
memories of triumph.
The first thing I have to say about this is that the repetition of memories isn't really my taste and I think that it really takes away from the poem itself, but that's just me, really. Anyway, onwards.
Those stripes are
the same color
as my first blanket.
Those polka dots
match my favorite
set of pajamas.
I honestly really like this part of the poem, so I don't have much to critique here. The only thing that I could critique here, is probably the tone of it? Your poem thus far sounds a bit formal and stiff, so I think that you could brush up on that and it could sound a lot better. Tone can really make or break your poem.
The plaid reminds
me of my father's
favorite shirt.
This argyle matches
ugly Christmas sweaters
my grandpa used to wear.
I think that this could have been incorporated into the last couple of stanzas, but that's entirely up to you.
The tartan is the same
pattern as my old
high school uniform.
These patterns have been
interwoven into my life.
They are part of me.
Honestly after parts of the rest of the poem, I think that this ended sort of weakly? I think you could have done it just a tad bit better and strengthened it, but that's entirely up to you.
This is an alright idea, to be honest. Thanks for sharing.
Sincerely, Casanova
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