Young Writers Society

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I liked the peom but I'm not sure what it's about . I'll probably understand it better if you explain it to me. I'm not very good with poetry.

THANKS

I would have liked the 'Up Up' in one line and then in the forth line 'high'.I guess its long and simple,though its good.

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I think you probably should have put this into lyrical, because, although you WROTE it from mulitple points of view, the poem is from one point of view. Yu still could have approached that a little nicer, Timjim.

I sort of like this poem, but I don't know what you are trying to convey with it, it doesn't really have a story with it. Some of it seems almost random babbling.

I like how you keep coming back to this grassy place... It's almost like a metaphor.

You turn crazy
Into a whirl

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Is this a narrative poem? No. You didn't put much effort into this poem, and you didn't put much effort into putting it in the right place. Uh oh. I'm sure you have better work than this.