Good use of vocabulary and you've obviously taken time on it. But I have to agree with Velvet whispers and sae, I have not got a clue what this is about? Care to elaborate?
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Start the hierophants clement it heaps
seeps in to augment arguments I find out.
My God! Can our relations confide?
Abide patients devour an odd sigh.
I plod an empowered publication worldwide.
Subdivided orchestrations scour plans, God why?
Good use of vocabulary and you've obviously taken time on it. But I have to agree with Velvet whispers and sae, I have not got a clue what this is about? Care to elaborate?
This poem has some nice wording and flow in it. I liked how the verses sound clear. I must admit, like Velvet.whispers, I did not quite understand this poem, as I did not see much of a clear message being told by the poem. Perhaps you could add some more description of what you wish to say to your audience. Anyhow... good job on the flow and wording! This could be a neat poem with some editing! See you around.
-Sae <3
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