It’s so much easier to say you’re antisocial… or claim that you don’t like people… or pretend that you just don’t care anymore… than to admit how lonely and damaged you truly feel.
Those words
are my truth.
They are my
life.
I relate to
them
More than to
life itself.
Do you ever
feel lonely
And unwanted
Even if you
Are with
your friends?
I can’t even
call them friends
When the
affection isn't shared.
Because they
don’t understand me.
Or that’s
what I tell myself.
Because I
drift alone,
No one to
get me.
Is that the
problem?
That other
people don’t get me?
Or is it
that
I’m not
understandable
I can’t
connect?
That’s how
it feels.
I do just
act
Like I don’t
enjoy
Being
surrounded by people
That I don’t
know.
And I say
“I don’t
enjoy the company of people,”
Just to cover
up
The fact
they don’t enjoy me.
And I do say
“I don’t
care what they think about me,”
But that’s
just because
They don’t
care about me.
“The heart
is a lonely hunter”
They all say.
It’s
isolated, far from anyone else.
But mine
isn’t isolated.
It’s completely
gone.
Torn apart
by many things.
Saddening
all those things were.
Now I’m left
with all that sadness.
I am damaged.
So, so
damaged.
But no one
can see
Because
they’re not looking.
And why
should they
Break their
perception of a perfect place?
All it’ll do
is make them sad.
That's not what I want.
I’ve made it
this far alone.
I can make it
the rest of the way.
No need to
worry about me.
Not that
they would.
I’m not mad
at them for this.
No, not at
all.
Why should
they be worried
About
someone like me?
I understand
their point and I agree.
Don’t
destroy your happiness
For someone
else.
For me
So if you
look for me.
Just know
I’m drifting
In a place
Nevermore.
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I can connect to this poem 100% so congratulations on that. I find it beautiful in its honesty. I think it's something that everybody feels at one point in their life but I love how you added the excuses people give.
I don't really know how to give you constructive criticism... I didn't see anything obviously wrong and I don't know poetry enough to judge it on those parameters.
This type of poem almost seems like it would work just as well written in story form.... almost.
Great poem
CreativelyWritten
Oooh this was chilly. I can relate all too much to this at times. I think it is very well written. I love your opening. "Those words are my truth./ They are my life./ I relate to them/ More than life itself." It forces the reader to go back and set the words above to mind and relate them perfectly throughout your poem. Then your imagery... I know there aren't any images that come to mind, but I don't have a better word for it. The way it is written just exudes a sort of alone ness that is not exactly lonely or happy but just numb. That happens when one is alone for too long I guess. A lot of people have been there. It's just easier to be alone than to let someone in for fear of what they might think or for fear of being a burden. The words get this across very well, and the end wraps it up just right. You can't stay in one place because it draws too much attention, so you just continue as you are. A drifter. Beautiful.
Thank you for sharing with us. Keep writing.
*the grey reality