Hello Tigerlilly37,
even though I am not against abortion I have to say that I found this poem moving. I am someone who is (as I'm sure most people are) against any cruelty towards children. Innocence is a fragile thing to easily stolen. I guess I haven't ever thought of abortion as taking away a child. But as you said yourself the outside world is 'unforgiving', I believe an unborn fetus is better off unborn than in this world. ANYWAY, this is a tricky topic that I don't wish to get too deep into.
I liked this poem, I liked the way it flowed and it was nice to read. The structure was great, starting off light then getting more sinister towards the end only to end with sarcasm. I thought the last like "It can't even speak" was an interesting choice. A fetus can't do a lot of things, was there a particular reason you chose speaking or was it just random? Maybe because it can't tell us it's suffering or? well whatever it is, I'd be interested to know.
Great poem and keep writing.
-plathonstone
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