I was bleeding the whole day, but no one could see.
Howdy hey! Gengar here to leave a review! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!Top Graham Cracker - What I KnowThis kind of reminds me of the kind of nu-metal songs you'd see commonly in the 2000's, in terms of the themes of mental health problems. But that's not an insult, because those kinds of songs are cool . Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for ImprovementsThere's nothing wrong with short poems, but this one feels like it is an excerpt from a larger piece. There are some details missing, and it almost feels like there was meant to be something before the first line. However, if this story is an excerpt from a longer story, then you can ignore this adviceChocolate Bar - Highlights of the PieceI like the emotion that was put into it. Even though it is so short, you managed to convey the speaker's feelings clearly, and you also were able to imply mental health issues without explicitly saying so. I especially liked how the second line is bigger and is bolded, because it adds emphasisClosing Graham Cracker - Closing ThoughtsOverall, this is a cool poem that I enjoyed reading. These two lines alone were well-written, so if you ever wrote anything bigger I think it'd be a nice read!I hope my review could be helpful. I wish you a good day/night!—GengarIsBestBoy
I walked around in the house which I hadn’t called home in a long time. Everyone was there, but also not. All busy with their daily life routine, too busy to ask me how I'm feeling or if I needed a hug or something. I was bleeding the whole day, but no one could see. Cause, the wounds were deep inside me.
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